This was a really interesting start I haven't been this invested in a story in a long time(Also I would love it if there was an option to call lord sheo grandpa)
I loved your work, it shows that you put a lot of love into the story, I liked the reference that is in the profile (if something sounds strange it is because English is not my native language and it is translated with Google)
No problems, this is good English in my opinion at least. It is not my first language either. Happy to hear you liked the story and the little reference :D
Edit I was gonna point out a couple of the spelling mistakes in the early game but now I'm thinking that pointing them out here may spoil some of the early game so I'll communicate those another way. But I still wanna say how excited I am about this project and I wish the best for it's development
Happy to hear you like the project! Thank you for your support and discretion! I will gladly hear about spelling mistakes! tumblr or email (in the demo feedback page) would work.
Currently in the interlude. I'm playing through with they/them pronouns. I've seen a few instances where words don't change to fit the plural, such as one where it said "They nuzzles into Lord Sheo" when it should nuzzled. I also saw where "is" should've been "are" and "was" should've been "were." I imagine it can be easy to keep track of the words that change when changing from he and she to they. Other than that, I'm excited to see where this goes!
This looks good and has potential, it's a bit early for me to say more but growing stronger in an orphanage in a fantasy setting sound like a lot of fun.
what a sad, bitter and still so beautiful start in your story. I'm glad the ancient found and rescued us, no one should ever do this to a child. (nor to other living beings.) i'm happy my MC trusted Havard and it was so sweet to 'see' them hugging each other :D I'm looking forward to read more and meet the other characters <3
oh and I found a writing mistake, it should be coughing, not couching (if you mean the 'cough, cough' sound when we try to talk to Havard C: )
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This was a really interesting start I haven't been this invested in a story in a long time(Also I would love it if there was an option to call lord sheo grandpa)
Thank you! Your wish will probably come true, I have a vague idea for a scene in mind :D
I loved your work, it shows that you put a lot of love into the story, I liked the reference that is in the profile (if something sounds strange it is because English is not my native language and it is translated with Google)
No problems, this is good English in my opinion at least. It is not my first language either. Happy to hear you liked the story and the little reference :D
This was really good! Can't wait for more in the future!
Edit I was gonna point out a couple of the spelling mistakes in the early game but now I'm thinking that pointing them out here may spoil some of the early game so I'll communicate those another way. But I still wanna say how excited I am about this project and I wish the best for it's development
Happy to hear you like the project! Thank you for your support and discretion! I will gladly hear about spelling mistakes! tumblr or email (in the demo feedback page) would work.
Currently in the interlude. I'm playing through with they/them pronouns. I've seen a few instances where words don't change to fit the plural, such as one where it said "They nuzzles into Lord Sheo" when it should nuzzled. I also saw where "is" should've been "are" and "was" should've been "were." I imagine it can be easy to keep track of the words that change when changing from he and she to they. Other than that, I'm excited to see where this goes!
Thank you for the feedback! I will try to see if I can fix that!
Loved it! This is a super interesting premise, creative too! Can't wait to read more :)
Glad to hear that! Thank you! Aah, it seems all my responses are basically the same :D Oh well, they are true.
So far I love it!! Made me want to cry!
Thank you very much! Glad to hear some emotions landed!
This looks good and has potential, it's a bit early for me to say more but growing stronger in an orphanage in a fantasy setting sound like a lot of fun.
Thank you! Let's hope growing up will be fun.... :D
what a sad, bitter and still so beautiful start in your story. I'm glad the ancient found and rescued us, no one should ever do this to a child. (nor to other living beings.) i'm happy my MC trusted Havard and it was so sweet to 'see' them hugging each other :D I'm looking forward to read more and meet the other characters <3
oh and I found a writing mistake, it should be coughing, not couching (if you mean the 'cough, cough' sound when we try to talk to Havard C: )
Thank you! Happy to hear you liked it so far! And thank you for the typo! I will fix that.
Awesome stuff. Can’t wait to follow this games progress.
Thank you! I am glad you like it so far!